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when the dawn coming the bird is singing on the tree，in front of window。I get up at six o""colck on time every morning。
I must wash my face and brash my teeth in ten minute。I have breakfast at seven o""colck。I eat some noodle take in a egg at a time。 seven o""colck-twlveo""colck go to gym and play football。I must be back before noon。I have lunch at home，I like chicken，corn and vegetabie。
I study in xue le at one o""colck to three o""colck afternoon。。。。。。Day after day，today is August twenty_sixth。 the holiday was coming to an end。
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点评内容：小作者这篇文章介绍的是自己怎样度过假期的，小作者在文中描述了自己一天的生活，首先是洗脸刷牙吃早餐，接着讲述了去踢足球、吃中饭、上学乐网站等事情。小作者交代得比较细致，让读者对小作者一天的生活有了一些了解。文章句子基本通顺，段落划分得也较为准确，小作者的英文写作能力不错呀！“seven o""""colck-twlveo""""colck go to gym”改为“seven o""clock-twelve o""clock go to game”。