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This is my family photo。
Look!These are my grandparents。Those are my parents。This is my sister。Her name is Lucy。This is my cousin，Tom。He is 13。His father is my father"s brother。This is me。I"m 13，too。We are happy!
Can you show me the photo of your family?
点评老师：
点评内容：本文清晰明了地介绍了全家福里的家庭成员，表达准确，无语言错误(除了最后的"the"改为"a"比较合适外)，唯一遗憾的是缺乏情感方面的描述，所以显得单薄。